What a nice, shiny new OC you have there. But, you know, if you seriously want to write original fiction, at some point you're going to have to learn to come up with plots that aren't:
A. Mysteries about overly dramatic crimes,
B. Vampires!!!1! or
C. People taking over governments by bizarre means.
Go back to square one. Try again.
Kthxbai.
PS-- Also, if you're going to write historical fiction, you need to start coming up with characters whose views make sense with their time/place.
PPS-- What's with all the lawyers? Maybe we shouldn't watch quite so much Law & Order. Just a thought.
